Meanwhile, deep in chapter five . . .

Just to reassure folks that George R.R. Martin I am not. Progress is being made and I should have the book out in plenty of time for inclusion in the mini-series. This has not even been proofed yet so don’t judge me too harshly; the ink is still wet.

Ver-4---Cut--200x300---The-Queen-of-Deceit-CoverHe had just passed the outer barbican when he saw the returning patrol. They were eleven riders, lightly armored and armed, and at their head rode his twin sister, Llewellyn.

Llew started and almost panicked before he realized he had little to be concerned with here. If she recognized him then he had nothing to fear, but if, as seemed almost certain, she did not, then that was only as according to plan. He would be just another nameless stranger on the road. With his head up, making no attempt to hide, he made to ride boldly past her as closely as possible, given the patrol following her.

The princess had evidently been deep in thought for she only looked up as he was already fairly close. Her eyes widened in shock when she saw him and Llew got a bad feeling. She stared a moment longer at him while he endeavored to hang on to his anonymity, even going so far as to dip his head and tug a forelock at her.

Then she found her voice. “Seize him!” she screamed, and drew her sword. Llew’s heart quailed in his chest. Never mind the patrol that accompanied her, there were few things in life he was willing to admit, even to himself, that he was frightened of, but Llewellyn’s blade was certainly one of them.

And Survey Says?

ToT-Alt-Cover-Cut-400x600pxFinally deciding less is more, this is the one I went with. My original thought was to have vast numbers of opponents on both sides (at least a dozen) but not only is that hard to show in silhouettes (and I wanted to keep to the same style as the The Forged Prince cover) but, on a cover, it seems like simplicity is more important. More than three elements plus the background is confusing and most often seems jumbled.

A cover should state genre and attract interest, or so I am told. An armored figure with undead should say epic fantasy and the simple Welsh valley backdrop should betray the setting somewhat. As always, the protagonist is accompanied by a black bird, denoting nature, armed combat, and mystery.

In the end I even took away Helgar. The barrow warriors are naked skeletons–although one is wearing a helmet and another is wearing boots (which got cut off)–rather than armored zombies because silhouettes of zombies would have shown little of their supernatural nature.

A lot of books these days just put a sword or medallion or something on the cover and call it good to go. There may be something to that. If I finish the series and sales don’t pick up to where I feel they should be, I might have to give it a try and purchase or commission some.

Mild-Mannered Writer’s Thoughts: Style

Clark-300res200x260pxAs I get more confident of my ability to turn out reader ready prose (creating books) I have inevitably learned a few things. I’m going to attempt to occasionally share them here if there proves to be any interest. Just for grins and to indicate I’m talking about writing in general and not something specific that I have written, I’m going to call this my Mild-Mannered Writer’s Thoughts and put my “news reporter at a major metropolitan newspaper” portrait with them.

Regarding Style

Know yourself. Some writers like to describe things and people in explicit detail. Some specialize in action, and others in dialogue. For myself, I get caught up in the dialogue and action and often fail to describe appearances of things as well as I could. That’s not a bad thing and it’s not a good thing. It’s just the way I write.  For example, I only recently learned that, in the five books of Lloyd Alexander’s Chronicles of Prydain series, the protagonist is never, ever described at all.  We are never even told what color his hair is. This is proof positive to me that, while description is an essential part of writing a story, it’s not necessary to describe things that aren’t essential. In point of fact, a description is really only essential if it is setting a mood or dropping a hint for the reader. You can pretty much trust the reader to fill in the rest. That does not necessarily mean you should not use lots of descriptions–it just means you don’t have to. Going back to Lloyd Alexander’s Prydain books, I’ve always had an image in my mind’s eye of exactly what Taran of Caer Dallben looked like but, if asked, I would have just assumed I had read it somewhere in one of those books.

On the other side, in Simon Green’s Nightside books, he describes everything. Allow me to give you an idea of what I mean. When I go to work I plug my kindle into my car stereo and listen to books all the way in and all the way home. It’s about a twenty minute commute (which in New York means it would be about five to ten minutes in any other place that I’ve ever lived). I noticed last month, in one of Mr. Green’s books, that at the start of my drive the protagonist was hailing a cab. When I got to my parking garage that protagonist was getting out of that cab.  There had not been any action or dialogue the entire time. For that author, in that genre, it seems to work. If I did that in my books not even my dad would read them. That’s how I know its not my style.